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[May. 14th, 2011|03:30 pm]
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There should be an annotated version of The Resurrectionists that uses John and Meghan's comments, I swear to god. They're so much better than the text. I'm sitting here editing from John's version and I know Megh's cracked me up hard on the last draft, too.

As a sample, from the bit I just edited (which is full of such rad hilarity leading up to this point, too):

Tom, meeting her stony glare with one of his own, only slightly different for the hint of smugness about the mouth and eyes, said, "Miss Hannah, it's nothing for which your admirable beau ought to feel ashamed. As I have long said, God has not left him without resources--and surely He would not be so cruel to the rest of our sex as to endow one man with every desirable quality. What woman would deign to speak to the rest of us?"

Hannah's smile twisted into something cruel, and she drew herself up to her full five-feet-and-four-inches. "So it is not only envy, but also jealousy. I daresay you're right to feel as much, Mr. Brandon. Absolutely right." [Oh, snap! - John]


I laughed so hard it hurt. Oh my god.

I now have this unshakable image of Paul, after Hannah flounces off, going, "Oh, snap! You just got served, sucker!"

And Tom being like, "Fuck that noise, man--haters gon' hate." As he straightens his cravat.
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[User Picture]From: [info]seanchai
2011-05-15 01:44 am (UTC)

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Bwahahahahaha!!

Also, glad I cracked you up. You do the same to me with some of the stuff you put in mine. I think that's what keeps us from wanting to kill ourselves when we're going through other people's red ink: the occasional bit of snark.
[User Picture]From: [info]aearonlinn
2011-05-15 03:23 am (UTC)

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Your commentary on wanting to strangle the life out of Paul is the perfect accompaniment to his on Tom being a smug, mean bastard. I have laughed so hard working on both major edits of this thing. My god, I am lucky to have you <3
From: [info]darwin_monkey
2011-05-18 06:20 pm (UTC)

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You know, if an annotated version of Res were ever to come out, my vanity would compel me to buy it. Even if I already had the original version. I'm just saying.

And you know, I wasn't a huge fan of Hannah, either. The thing is, she and Tommy are totally spot-on in their respective analysis of each other, just in the meanest, most harshly and overtly biased way possible. I did start taking a shine to Will toward the end, though. It was a pleasant surprise. Plus, he got bonus points for shooting Tom.

Now he just needs to bring Hannah up short and he'll be right up there with Dartmoor in my esteem.
[User Picture]From: [info]aearonlinn
2011-05-18 09:37 pm (UTC)

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Yes, Hannah is, in my opinion, the most insufferable of all. She was universal, though. You were the only one to really give running Tom commentary (though Megh tore into him, it wasn't in the same way) and she was the only one to give running Paul commentary (though you tore into him, not--like that).

But I will say for Hannah that she's also the only one likely to grow out of it. Paul will always be an idiot, and Tom will always be a raging prick. Hannah, at least, is mostly the product of an overpriveleged (or as you so aptly put it, "outrageously pampered"--which I now think of every time I think of Hannah and grin) childhood, which is soon to be over.

Once Will starts standing up to her (and oh, he will--I'm not sure where it happens in the next book, but I am sure why), she'll be better. In fact, I have reason to believe she'll like it. A lot.

she and Tommy are totally spot-on in their respective analysis of each other
I'm so glad that's clear, seriously. That was the entire point of their hatred--they're the only ones who really see either of themselves (that's awkwardly worded... can't think of a better way to say it, either...) for what they are, but they're just so. fucking. extreme. they can only see it from one angle.

And that much at least won't change. But by the end I sort of see it falling into a comfortable kind of bickering brother-and-sister thing that they'd be kind of lonely without.